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Post by lookingthroughyou on Oct 2, 2004 17:16:48 GMT -5
Hey everyone. I thought of this story this morning..and I'm only done a bit of a chapter. Tell me what you think!
Chapter 1
Michelle picked up the box in the attic and carried it to the edge of the stairs to unpack it. Her mom had decided to sell all her old records and clothes, since they were just gathering dust in the attic, but Michelle decided to go through them and salvage all the cool 60's and 70's stuff she could find. She quickly tugged off the lid of the old brown box of LP's, and pulled out the first one in the stack. "A hard day's night" it was called, and it had a very strange picture on the cover, containing five rows of pictures of 4 men with almost identical haircuts. She flipped over the record sleeve and read the songs on the back. While she read the names of the songs, she remembered hearing some of the songs when her mom sung them to her as a little kid, and when she read the name, "The Beatles" She remembered some of what her mother had told her. they were a band from the sixties, and they were the love of many young girls' lives at their height. She flipped over the cover again and looked at the individual boys, but as she stared into the eyes of the four young men, she felt the world spinning around her. As her eyes blacked out, she heard a beautiful melody in her ears, but before she could recall what it was, the world fell away in front of her.
hope you like it so far! I'll post more when I get some "reviews". ;D
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Post by lookingthroughyou on Oct 2, 2004 18:58:00 GMT -5
comeon guys...tell me what you think! I'm dying here!  |
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Post by lookingthroughyou on Oct 3, 2004 15:52:56 GMT -5
Alright...since nobody wants to say anything..I'll continue with chapter 2. (I have short chapters).  Chapter 2 When Michelle opened her eyes, she was lying on the bathroom floor of a hotel. She sat up slowly, trying to take in her surroundings. she pinched herself a couple of times, but the ugly wallpaper didn't transform into her attic. she frowned to herself, confused at how she had ended up in a hotel bathroom, when seconds previously, she had been sitting on the floor of her attic, looking at beatles records. Suddenly a flash came to her. What if...? No, that was too ridiculous. slowly, she got up to go out of the door and figure out how she got to this room, when the tinkling of piano notes came to her. It sounded like a parisian tune, but there were no words to the tune that she could hear. slowly she opened the door, to just listen to the music playing in the next room. She slipped out of the cramped bathroom, and gasped at what she saw. It was one of the young men on the cover of her mother's 40-year-old record, one of the beatles, just playing away at the piano. When he finished the song he was playing he just sat at the piano, staring at the keys. He looked, michelle thought, extremely mournful to be a pop star of his stature. Suddenly, he spun around, and jumped when he saw michelle standing there, but soon broke into a wide grin. "Allo luv! how'd you get in, eh?" he said with an overdone liverpudlian accent. She stared closer at his face and realized he was Paul Mccartney, one of the top songwriters of the century. Just as she was about to stutter out an answer, the door slammed, and three other loud voices crowded on top of one another. Well...that's the end of chapter 2. Hope you enjoy it so far. I think I might change it into a story where people can just add a chapter if they want to. Then I can like copy+paste and like...publish it on the website. or something. ideas, anybody? |
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Post by ringoswhore on Oct 3, 2004 18:46:18 GMT -5
It's great so far! Hope you write more!
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Michelle
Day Tripper
hold your head up, you silly girl
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Post by Michelle on Oct 3, 2004 18:53:22 GMT -5
*dances* I have my own fanfic! ;D Hehe, J/k! Nice job lookingthruyou, keep writing  |
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Post by lookingthroughyou on Oct 3, 2004 20:12:34 GMT -5
YAY! I'm glad you like it guys...yeah when I named it I thought you'd like it. heehee. it does have a purpose tho! the name that is.
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Post by HeyHeyJohnny on Oct 6, 2004 14:28:45 GMT -5
Post more of it!! I'm dying to read more!! |
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Post by Cranberry Sauce on Oct 7, 2004 19:42:26 GMT -5
Ooooh, I really like it so far! I hope you write more! |
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Post by lookingthroughyou on Oct 12, 2004 16:27:12 GMT -5
Sorry it took me so long. It took me a while to think of an idea..see I'm bad at dialogue between the boys, so it might be short, just to let you critique it. oh and critcize it as much as you like!
Chapter 3
As michelle turned to greet the noisy voices that were coming closer every second, paul grabbed her head and forced it under the piano. She sputtered, "what are you DOING!?" before he completely shoved her under. "You'd better stay there until they leave again," He whispered. "I don't want them to think I've got another girl in 'ere!" Michelle was pretty confused about the last sentence but decided to ask him about it later. He quickly jumped up from under the piano and began playing a very simple tune. Shortly after he did this, a loud male voice stopped him. "Who ya talkin' to, paul? I thought you weren't 'avin any more girls in 'ere, eh?"
sorry! I have to go! will post more later!! hope you liked it so far!
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Post by HeyHeyJohnny on Oct 15, 2004 19:55:49 GMT -5
Whhee!!! ;DI can't wait for more! Great story!
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Post by ringoswhore on Oct 16, 2004 22:53:23 GMT -5
Keep writing! I can't wait for the next chapter!
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Lucy in the Sky
Day Tripper
"When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace" - Jimi Hendrix
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Post by Lucy in the Sky on Nov 9, 2004 1:15:39 GMT -5
Yes, please go on. |
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Post by wrestlingdog on Nov 15, 2004 15:43:09 GMT -5
heeheehee! I lurve it! Please write more!
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Post by ibrake4whales on Jan 8, 2005 1:35:15 GMT -5
o i cant wait!!! please write more!
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Post by me on Jan 8, 2005 4:53:52 GMT -5
Olivia, please, please, please write more. It's great.
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