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Post by CrowDish on Sept 13, 2004 6:25:06 GMT -5
You wouldn't ruin it, luv, I promise
But I'm pretty sure Mindy is writing the next John/Rita chapter, I kind of got on my knees and begged her a little bit
But if you'd take a chapter later on into it, I think that would be great
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Post by Emma on Sept 13, 2004 19:24:04 GMT -5
I'll consider it.  Just have to wait until something inspires me, or I know it won't turn out well. |
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Post by CrowDish on Sept 14, 2004 16:05:09 GMT -5
There was a quote in the Playboy Interviews when David (the interviewer) was just throwing out song titles for John to discuss, that I thought you guys might like.
D: Lovely Rita?
J: That's Paul writing a pop song
D: Was there really a Rita, did you know?
J: Nah! He makes 'em up like a novelist.
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Post by Mindy on Sept 14, 2004 16:27:14 GMT -5
I get to write it! I wrote the 'kinky' chapter! lol Crow.
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Post by CrowDish on Sept 14, 2004 16:28:33 GMT -5
Hahahahaha. Kinky! XD
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Post by Mindy on Sept 14, 2004 17:58:01 GMT -5
The little ones shield your eyes! Lol, even though I am a little one...
Here's the next chapter!!!
John was slightly annoyed that his best mate had disturbed his charming attempts of flirtation, right when, John thought, it was about to get good!
John was closing the door behind him, winked at Rita who was looking more uncomfortable then ever, at shut the door behind him. “What’s up?” He turned his head towards Paul.
Paul said nothing, he actually did feel bad for interrupting John, he thought he’d been sleeping for awhile, and everything had been done with Rita, only talking was left, and Paul knew how awkward the ‘after-talking’ could be. He thought he had saved John. Although he felt bad about this, he felt even more terrible about something else.
“I feel bad, John—“ Paul began.
“Well you should! She’s an awesome lassie, mate, really is.” John was looking around, he was always looking for something, just never knowing what exactly it was. “Now what about the sink? He focused his eyes on Paul.
“Oh yeah, the sink, well y’see, I was washing me hands, and I was so angry at meself, that I hit the sink, and the water went everywhere.”
“Bet that didn’t make yer mood any better, eh?” John smiled.
“Can’t say it did, no” Paul looked away.
They both walked into the bathroom and John noticed only a little puddle of water on the floor, instantly swearing at Paul for his interruption, and the cause it had done, for just this stupid little puddle.
‘This is the bloody mess?!” John was infuriated. “This is what you pulled me out of me bedroom for! When you could have just soaked it up with a bloody hanky!”
“John, listen, I have to talk to you about something…”
“You know Paul I don’t need you lookin’ after me, alright?”
“I’m not!” Paul protested.
“You know we have Norm for that shit!” John was angry, beyond belief.
‘Well, he hasn’t done the best of jobs, now has he?!” Paul was proud, this was one of his very rare cheeky comments that had taken John aback. John looked at him, smiled slightly, then almost instantly glared at him, with menacing eyes.
“And I don’t expect him to either” John came back at Paul. “Why, mate…” John began to ask.
“Paul lowered his head in shame, I’m sorry, mate, I really am, I felt so guilty bossing you around like that, telling you you shouldn’t be with Rita, I’m sorry.”
For the second time in less the 5 minutes John was yet again taken aback by one of Paul’s comments. “How unlikely” he began to think off topic, suddenly hearing Paul’s voice flow threw his ears brought him back.
“I shouldn’t interrupt your business, unless, of course, it is really business.” Paul raised his head and looked at John, and gave a sheepish smile.
John laughed, feeling suddenly relieved, “Hey, I’m not like that, mate, sorry!” John threw his hands up in the air shaking his head “All zee rumors are a lie!!” John said jokingly. Paul opened his mouth to talk. “I know what you meant, ya twit” John smiled, looked backwards toward his bedroom and spoke very loudly; clearly enough so Rita could hear “WELL I S’POSE THAT’S IT! THE SINK IS DONE, MATE!?” John winked at Paul.
“YEP!” Paul yelled back. John hooked his arm around Paul, and patted his back, Paul did that same in return, and whispered “Don’t leave out any details when you’re explaining it tomorrow, aye?”
John chuckled walked to his room and opened the door, there was Rita, and her unique, yet beautiful face lay sleeping on John’s pillow. John couldn’t help but smile. He kicked off his boots and walked toward his dresser as he heard them ‘thud’ against the bed.
“You did that on purpose!” Rita giggled as her eyes suddenly seemed to lighten.
“Were you..?”
“Uhuh” Rita gave a devious smile.
John walked over and plopped himself right next to Rita, looking at her, with his closed-mouth grin. “Give me a kiss!” He said jokingly.
“Now, you are quite the gentleman” Rita began to stand up from the bed. John held her arm down.
“Don’t go! Where are you going?” John felt his stomach do a summer-sault as Rita walked further and further away from the bed.
“I’m only giving you what you wanted.” Rita gave a cheeky smile.
John’s face was of pure confusion, if he wanted anything, he certainly didn’t want her to leave. Rita turned toward him, standing close to the door, John’s face miserable, yet speechless, she turned around, and walked on the other side of the bed, where John sat, pushing his shoulders down until his beautiful hair touched the feathery down comforter. She followed his body, and one leg lay on top of his body and her arm across his chest, she leaned in and gave John just what he asked for, a kiss.
John’s hands moved slowly around Rita’s body, threw her hair, and around all her curves, the flips in his stomach were Olympic. He couldn’t believe all the emotions he was feeling.
Rita moved her right leg closer toward the headboard; after all they were lying sideways on the bed, and situated herself on John.
John’s hands were clutching her hips and he lay there, unable to move quickly in fear his stomach would fail, and passionately kissed one of the most unique girls he had ever met. In a moments time they were bound together, two lovers in an affair of pure lust, they had each other.
Rita lay back down and kissed John’s cheek, John, still unable to make a sudden move, gently held her cheek in his hands, and slowly moved his thumb up and down her cheek bone. Rita held her hand up to his and did nothing but smile, for that was her only emotion, happiness.
Rita unhurriedly moved her hand down, and wrapped it around John torso, resting her head on his shoulder, and his head resting on hers, they peacefully fell asleep.
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Post by CrowDish on Sept 14, 2004 18:26:58 GMT -5
You're right, that was kinky! Hahaha it rocked so hard. I already told you this, but it bears repeating. And the line “Don’t leave out any details when you’re explaining it tomorrow, aye?” was so funny, it made me cry. Mindy = totally gear. <33333
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Post by Icee on Sept 14, 2004 20:57:33 GMT -5
Haha that was great *Giggles*
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Post by Emma on Sept 15, 2004 14:06:18 GMT -5
*giggles* Awesome chapter.
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Post by Mindy on Sept 15, 2004 14:41:31 GMT -5
Thanks guys! |
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Post by Lucy on Sept 15, 2004 15:40:53 GMT -5
That was great Mindy. *also giggles*
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Post by CrowDish on Sept 15, 2004 16:24:16 GMT -5
-big group giggle-
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Post by Mindy on Sept 15, 2004 19:11:05 GMT -5
I was going to end the chapter with Paul, getting up to get some semi-fresh air in the hallway and he 'sees a girl who has a odd resemblance to his mate, Ringo, but then he realizes it's late, and walks back'
I had something like that, then I decided it ruined the poignant-ness of John and Rita, and I didn't want that to be taken away so quickly.
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Post by CrowDish on Sept 15, 2004 19:29:05 GMT -5
Yeah, sometimes you just have to end it where the end comes XD But I bet someone else will use that one now
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Post by Mindy on Sept 15, 2004 21:04:16 GMT -5
maybe =)
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Just have to wait until something inspires me, or I know it won't turn out well.
